BUZZ BUZZ Once There Was...

( Chapter 2. Reposting of yesterday's 4 paragraphs with an additional 1/2 the chapter. 2,174 words. )



I got to talk to my editor today. Hello dee!! The poor thing has been laid up repeatedly with pain issues and now with a cold from hell. :( But she had many many many excellent suggestions that would never have come to light if I hadn't just freakin' bit the bullet and started writting. Those same suggestions pretty much make chunks of the stuff i've already done obsolete, but what the hell! We're going for VERBAGE now and EDITTING later!

Still. Fancy fun. She's so much help. When I grow up I wanna be strong and helpful like her. :D



edit: forgot the spiffy graph thing!

( Chapter 1, final 2/3 with fixes. 2,612 Words. )






So, I went back to when I started disliking what i was writing yesterday and added some stuff. It hit me in the middle of the night that there's no way the turtles would have neglected to post at least ONE look-out while surrounded by hordes of humans, all hunting for them. So that got added. I fixed up the sound effects so that they were part of text and a larger picture.

I worry that once again, I lost track of the fog. I worry that I've skimped on what should have been massively visceral reactions. I feel like the characters are flat and the adrenaline peeters out before the chapter is over.

But. All of that is for my editor to help me with. the point is that i WROTE. And HAVING something to edit is the goal! :D Huzzah! Tomorrow we start on Chapter 2!! ...i have to look at my outline and figure out what's IN chapter 2...

but first, BED! :D

and my spiffy graphy thingy:

( Chapter 1, First third. 1,665 Words. )

I knew it was time to stop tonight b/c i'd just started typing sound effects. Nothing new. So, we're shy of the 2000 word mark tonight, but still not too shabby!

Here's my spiffy graph again:

( Hanami Prologue. 2027 words. )

If my editor and I both like this, then you may see it again in finished fiction format. Otherwise, it will disappear into the void and never be spoken of again.

Here's my spiffy graph: